English 10
This class I LOVED!!! Mr.Bigelow was like the best English teacher ever! The first book that we ever read in that class was " The house on mango street" which was actually a really weird book! The book was kind of everywhere that's why we would talk about it in class. He was a super duper guper funny guy and we could tell him anything and he'd be fine with it. This class was the BEST we did a lot and made some really gross memories!
Priya Raj
Mr. Bigelow
English 10
Febuary 13,2014
Blood Will Have Blood
In any media whether that be TV, newspapers, or magazines you[GB1] see the main idea or product. The entrepreneur wants you to be hooked on to that product and spent money on it. Well authors are like entrepreneurs also, they try to sell you the most exciting points in the play to catch your attention. The play Macbeth written by William Shakespeare has a series of eye catching plots in the play to get you hooked! In the play violence is what keeps the action going. Shakespeare displays violence as a reoccurring cycle: violence will have violence. The protagonist Macbeth uses violence to get what he wants but his ambition also plays a roll. The acts of violence lead Macbeth to glory, destruction and downfall. [GB2]
Glory can be symbolized in many ways, but pride makes it the foulest. The play starts off with Macbeth and Banquo returning from battle and the bloody captain complementing Maceth on his killings. He is a hero in everyone’s eyes who “ne’er shook hands, nor bade farewell to him, till be unseamed him from the nave to th’chops, and fixed his head upon our battleman[GB3] ” (1.2.20-25). Macbeth[GB4] seemed like a killer from the beginning for no sorrow of his deaths, violence will have violence. Shakespeare writes that “It will have blood, they say. Blood will have blood”(3.4.122). The king happily acknowledged Macbeth’s news and wanted to congratulate him on the rebels fight. Macbeth is not the only one that is full of hubris in the play. Lady Macbeth says “My hands are of your color/I shame to wear a heart so white” (2.2.63) Death and blood are glorified throughout the play by the blood that has spelt and the pride of winning. [GB5]
Destruction is played by[GB6] emotion mostly in the play. Macbeth destroys families, emotions and his relationships. After Macbeth’s congratulations from the king he plans the murder of King Duncan with Lady Macbeth. During the banquet Macbeth steps out for a quick breeze when he sees “a dagger which I see before me/come, let me clutch thee(2.1.35)[GB7] approaches him. The fact that he wanted the dagger brings him closer to assassination. His hubrisand the want of power drives him to kill his first victim out of terror in not being a man. Full of fear that “take the present horror from the time/the bell invites me/that summons thee to heaven or to hell” (2.1[GB8] .65). He murders the king with two bloody daggers and frames the guards. Macbeth loses everything once this event has occurred. It had seemed that the heavens were in sorrows of the death. Ross says “by th’clock’tis day,/and yet dark night strangles the travelling lamp/ Is’t night’s predominance or the day’s shame.” (2.4.5-10)
Not finished: Add conclusion-maybe one more body paragraph
Shine: a claim that clearly answers the prompt.
Goals: Body paragraphs: add strong topic sentences that are sub points of your claim, use evidence to show and prove those sub points, and explain the relevance of your evidence with commentary.
Score: 5/9=C
[GB1]This is second person- stay in 3rd
[GB2]I think between these three sentences you do clearly outline the statement Shakespeare is making onviolence
[GB3]Nice job integrating quote.
[GB4]I don’t follow this sentence
[GB5]At this point, I am still not entirely sure what you are attempting to prove. Your paragraph makes some good points, but it lacks a strong topic sentence to give it direction and focus.
[GB6]
[GB7]Citation goes at end of sentence
[GB8]Remember you should be using evidence to illustrate the main point you are trying to make in this paragraph.
Priya Raj
Mr. Bigelow
English 10
Febuary 13,2014
Blood Will Have Blood
In any media whether that be TV, newspapers, or magazines you[GB1] see the main idea or product. The entrepreneur wants you to be hooked on to that product and spent money on it. Well authors are like entrepreneurs also, they try to sell you the most exciting points in the play to catch your attention. The play Macbeth written by William Shakespeare has a series of eye catching plots in the play to get you hooked! In the play violence is what keeps the action going. Shakespeare displays violence as a reoccurring cycle: violence will have violence. The protagonist Macbeth uses violence to get what he wants but his ambition also plays a roll. The acts of violence lead Macbeth to glory, destruction and downfall. [GB2]
Glory can be symbolized in many ways, but pride makes it the foulest. The play starts off with Macbeth and Banquo returning from battle and the bloody captain complementing Maceth on his killings. He is a hero in everyone’s eyes who “ne’er shook hands, nor bade farewell to him, till be unseamed him from the nave to th’chops, and fixed his head upon our battleman[GB3] ” (1.2.20-25). Macbeth[GB4] seemed like a killer from the beginning for no sorrow of his deaths, violence will have violence. Shakespeare writes that “It will have blood, they say. Blood will have blood”(3.4.122). The king happily acknowledged Macbeth’s news and wanted to congratulate him on the rebels fight. Macbeth is not the only one that is full of hubris in the play. Lady Macbeth says “My hands are of your color/I shame to wear a heart so white” (2.2.63) Death and blood are glorified throughout the play by the blood that has spelt and the pride of winning. [GB5]
Destruction is played by[GB6] emotion mostly in the play. Macbeth destroys families, emotions and his relationships. After Macbeth’s congratulations from the king he plans the murder of King Duncan with Lady Macbeth. During the banquet Macbeth steps out for a quick breeze when he sees “a dagger which I see before me/come, let me clutch thee(2.1.35)[GB7] approaches him. The fact that he wanted the dagger brings him closer to assassination. His hubrisand the want of power drives him to kill his first victim out of terror in not being a man. Full of fear that “take the present horror from the time/the bell invites me/that summons thee to heaven or to hell” (2.1[GB8] .65). He murders the king with two bloody daggers and frames the guards. Macbeth loses everything once this event has occurred. It had seemed that the heavens were in sorrows of the death. Ross says “by th’clock’tis day,/and yet dark night strangles the travelling lamp/ Is’t night’s predominance or the day’s shame.” (2.4.5-10)
Not finished: Add conclusion-maybe one more body paragraph
Shine: a claim that clearly answers the prompt.
Goals: Body paragraphs: add strong topic sentences that are sub points of your claim, use evidence to show and prove those sub points, and explain the relevance of your evidence with commentary.
Score: 5/9=C
[GB1]This is second person- stay in 3rd
[GB2]I think between these three sentences you do clearly outline the statement Shakespeare is making onviolence
[GB3]Nice job integrating quote.
[GB4]I don’t follow this sentence
[GB5]At this point, I am still not entirely sure what you are attempting to prove. Your paragraph makes some good points, but it lacks a strong topic sentence to give it direction and focus.
[GB6]
[GB7]Citation goes at end of sentence
[GB8]Remember you should be using evidence to illustrate the main point you are trying to make in this paragraph.